halogirl4197

Gooooood gracious! Lol you have a bunch of spelling errors and punctuation! Hehehe :), other than that I think you should have made this a novel because I kind of ...

It's alright :) kind of dull but has a good meaning to it. Try to open up more and be more descriptive. Use unusual words and phrases! :) Also, you ...

You need to be more descriptive :) don't be so straight forward in your poetry (unless you roll like that). I liked it, sorta, I usually don't prefer this type ...

Nice! I thought it was great, however, at the beginning I'm really confused about what it's talking about. How is she a liar? You used good description and word flow ...

It was an okay story, didn't seem to have a central point to making it but hey, it's not mine :). I understand that it's a first person story but ...

This is sooooo good! I did also nearly cry and it was so romantic. Any girl would be lucky to have you and the girl you wrote this for must ...

It's very annoying that you repeat over and over that she was blind. If this was a poem, then sure, go ahead and repeat it but this a story. You've ...

I love the idea! And I can tell you learned a good bit from history class XD all I can say is don't be so straight forward in the beging. ...

I hate to judge this story since I'm very religious but it's very un-descriptive and kind of boring. You're jumping from scene to scene and it's kind of confusing. It's ...

This is kind of confusing, but maybe that's just. At first, I didn't even know if the narrator was a boy or girl. I thought it was talking about a ...

Oh my gosh! I should have written a poem for mothers day XD all I gave my mom was a power point that was actually a class assignment. Was this ...

At the beginning you were WAY to straight forward and it got confusing towards the middle when she was having her kid. I have no idea what was going on. ...

Hi! :) I came to review. First of all, the way you wrote the story kind of bored me a bit. However, the idea is good but also very well ...

It was okay.... You need to be more descriptive :) at first, I didn't understand what was going on or how he got his weird disorder on his face. I ...

I'm kinda confused about the whole thing =/. It might be just me but I don't understand who they're writing too. At first, I thought they were like making a ...