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hahaballoobuh here! I think that this is a very good beginning, for it leaves the reader thinking, "Okay, so obviously, this isn't from the 20th/21st century, but where are they, ...

Oh my gosh, I am literally shaking right now. That was amazing! Your writing has amazing voice, imagery, and the metaphor with the thunderstorm put so much in perspective. I ...

I love it! A couple things though: [ “Ooohhhh yyyyeeessss ttthhhheeeerrrreeee iiiisssss,” an eerie wail corrected. ] It's kind of awkward for the word to carry on like that and ...