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Lol, it means introducing your work with words that are outside your story, i.e. this is my first work, I've worked on it X long, ect.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :( How can you do this two me, twit, I mean how? :( :( :( Anyway, a couple small comments: Sherringford gave a short bark of laughter. ‘Don’t ask ...

Lol, I just totally spotted one of my own mistakes in the bit you quoted; "read" should be "red." ;) Thanks so much, my twiterling! ONE WEEK!!!

Nadak, I think, will never go fully good. But he does go useful, which is better. ;) Thanks much to all you wonderful editing people! *scatters toffee* Shall try to ...

Chapter 21 Nadak floated through dreams, half-memories, half-fantasies. A proud father, welcoming him home; the terror on the faces of those he killed; his smiling mother stroking his hair and ...

I think you've got a good start here, but for some reason it didn't feel that this was a poem that should ryhme. I like your use of questions, keep ...

Aero, you are like my inner concious when it comes to this story--if it ever gets published, you are so very in the acknowledgements page! *lots of cookies* Your insights ...

Quite enjoyed it meself, but listen to Fand. That poetry nut knows her stuff. ;)

AMAZING!!!!

You're fantastic!!! *hugs* Like I said, I can't integrate it immediately as I would like to, but in answer to your question about the " alien lover " look--it's not ...

The four being...Sharr Kavan, Mitra, Lativichia and...whoever the other one was. Cool. LOL! :D The four are Sharr, Kivan, Mitra, and Latrichia, darling--thanks for reading!

You're such a sweetheart!!! *hugs* And, quite frankly, you're generally right about the logic, and I shall fix such things as I can, but one thing you need to remember, ...

I really appreciated all this, aero, you're invaluable!!! Mostly, I've just been sloppy with my military accuracy--I know most of the stuff you told me, I just didn't take the ...

Ooo! I must check this out, espeically as I just played Titania in a production of MSND (that's MidSummer Night's Dream, sorry).

CL you're an absolute wonder! *many hugs* This is hugely useful, I love your format of critting. Do not dare let me rest until I have integrated this!