gyrfalcon

Not a bad poem at all, darling, you do some clever things with words and images, but my personal preference is for a poem that has a little more of ...

Aha! *dances for joy* Yay, chapter, yay, chapter! But I thought you said Bird committed suicide? I do like Holmes cutting her hair, and the baggy nightshirt. :D Shall be ...

Two main things, one little, one a little more over-arching. 1) Don't start with "Tonight" if you're going to write this scene in past tense. Start with "That night" or ...

Yep, I loved the Hobb books myself and always thought that was a good device she used. Here's an idea: a friend of mine wrote a book (never went anywhere, ...

Mwahaha! This is your punishment for not posting on THIOBS or Fool's Hope! I shall critique this chapter instead! *evil laugh* So there. ;)

Quite a lovely poem, darling! Only a few teeny comments: sixty hours over 7/8 days I like "sixty hours," but "7/8" kinda threw me. Do you mean seven to eight ...

Well, I hope I don't repeat Smurf too much, but you asked for a falcon's eye, so here we go! Learning to ride my first pony, a dumpy but steady ...

Ooo, I see I am not the first to give this one a whack, so I appologize if I repeat anything. So, here goes, and you know I only shred ...

:smt022 :smt022 :smt022 *blubbering sobs!!!* :smt022 :smt022 :smt022 *sniff, sniff, sniff*

Really enjoyed this piece, darling! ;) And yeah, I thought Prynne was something to do with Scarlet Letter , and since you didn't give us much idea as to time ...

A great rhythm (sp?) here, whence, an easy-to-read cadence that pulls the reader along at a steady pace (not too fast, not too slow). Great imagery in the word-choices, even ...

Oh, darling, thank you! I live in the Midwest myself, but am currently studying abroad in England. But for those few moments when I was reading your story, it was ...

It's not just Brits who use single quotes though - Robin Hobb does as well. Actually, hate to burst your bubble, but that's only in the British editions of her ...

:smt021 Me terrible bird! I'm sooooo sorry I haven't gotten around to critting this yet, Rome just ate up my weekend and all my strength with it! I SHALL give ...

Okay, really don't take this the wrong way, but I was quite surprised to find that a thirteen-year-old could write with the level of sophistication you've shown. To be honest, ...