gyrfalcon

Hello, Dynamo! Um, I'm in kinda a hurry, so I'm sorry that I didn't read your chapter all the way through. Just a few things jumped right out: Darc is ...

Awesome, truly real and vivid and alive in my imagination. I didn't even realize until about half-way through that it was written present-tense, and those kinds of things tend to ...

hello! very nicely dark poem (oxymoron, I know), I quite enjoyed it. there were just a few lines I got kinda hung up on, the same basic thing each line: ...

I think it's fantastic! As Skoink says, the words literally DANCE! You really make the charecters and the settings come to life for me. I never really liked historical fiction ...

I must say, the context and the subject both grabbed my attention very well. But the wording was a bit akward. I don't know if I'm supposed to be offering ...