greenjay

Not bad. You'll have to be very careful to stay away from cliches though for the next chapters. Goodjob. -the green one

That section was a little bit confusing, but more random than confusing. Anyway, I'm sure you'll explain it later. Goodjob. -the jay of green

Cool! I like it. On to next part...

Cool! Not too eventful but who cares. Goodjob. -some pun on greenjay

Pretty cool! I liked it. Like most everyone else said, it could use some more discription to make it capture the readers interest. All in all, good job! -greenjay

Sweetness! I like it. I also like how the forest spirit saves Kiera, and yay! someone finally beat the winged mercenaries! :P anyway good job! -Greenie

Two thumbs-up! Sweet! I don't really have anything to say, but it was good, so there... -Greenie

Hey, thanks. I aggree that there is not much of a story line at all. I wrote this a while back just to try something different. I don't think I'll ...

Ooooo! Interesting. Please write more. -Me

Simple and interesting. Please write more.

All I can say is cool and interesting! Write more! The End

Good! I definitely like this better. One thing The three simultaneously bent their legs, opened their wings and launched themselves into the air, spiraling upwards and forwards in perfect unison, ...

Hey thanks! I edited it some, but did not re-write the first part. I know it needs it but I'm to lazy and am busy on my novel :P. Thanks! ...

Ahh! You scared me on that one. Much better, good job! PS: I'd cut the swearing if I were you, but that's just me.

Hi! I thank you both profusely (can't get out of old English can I). I changed some things in the story and hopefully improved on it. I added a poll ...