goldcomet

You know, I don't even remember what the title was, but talk about weird. Basically, it was your typical knights in armor sort of thing, (and they rode these things ...

I really enjoyed Sabriel, but the second book was a little drawn out, but I was satisfied with it as a series. And usually I have no patience for talking ...

This is great. The personification towards the beginning and end is good, and how it becomes/ compared to different things- a puzzle, a light, a migraine, etc. The only issue ...

I was also a tad confused as to what was occurring in his mind and what was real, easily remedied with a little extra clarification. I was curious- is his ...

I just want to say that this really broke my preconceived notions of what beautiful poetry should look like, and most of these stanzas could stand on nicely on their ...

You have some pretty lines here that flow well. The second stanza has such a good ring to it you might even want to consider repeating it as a refrain. ...