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gazdemon

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Summer

    It was nice, but very short...I felt you could have done more with an entire season and been more unique. Your rhymes were nice, but nothing special...perhaps you could try ...

    Jun 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: An Angel's decent

    The poem was one of your best. I loved the imagery and how the rhymes worked together. maybe it should be 'awash' instead of 'a wash', thats the only crit. ...

    Jun 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: In the early hours.

    Above the town, The sky is split lovely use of form here, spacing the lines out - decentring the reader. And tugged from east to west by clouds. Tiny black ...

    Jun 30, 2008
  • Other » General, General Re: My goodbye to a teacher

    That was great to read, it is great that you have such a high regard for a teacher that you took the time to write this. Mr. B must mean ...

    Jun 30, 2008
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Harry Potter

    It is good, but I had a few qualms with it. In the beginning you tell us how the students feel, etc. but instead it makes it more interesting for ...

    Jun 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: whatever title you want

    Icaruss is right, he made me laugh so much. You need to consider things more carefully. You won't get sympathy by making up a 'poem' on the spot...you need to ...

    Jun 29, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: An Evening Lullaby

    I enjoyed your poem, it was very relaxing and your choice of words really lent themselves to the style of a lullaby. The only little problem I had was in ...

    Jun 28, 2008


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