foxfire

tHE WRITING IS GOOD EXCEPT FOR THE SPACING. it might be better if it could be divided in paragraph rather than one line. I am a bit confuse on readinga ...

I like the mode this story is... The sad and somewhat scary mood is definetely there. The way that this boy is not notice by people and that he is ...

well...what i want to say is could be a bit better if you add some more description or some emotions to the text. the part where the werewolf found out ...

Day tripper...i like it... though i am confuse what casued him to be angry...i think it gave a series of suspense and some mystery to it. though i admit i ...

Hey...Day tripper... i read your story...i like it a lot... it is simple but it works... though i may suggest that you may need some more description on some scenes ...

Nice...i like the way you give the mood of the story and how creepy it makes. though one comment is that the story is a bit sadistic and merciless. Well ...

well for one thing...the story is sadistic...i can feel the urge of merciless killing... hehehe...good stuff...i like the way you create that kind of mood and the weapon of choise ...

nice story...but the only there is that it wpould be better if there woulkd eb good description of the child and change the baby's cry to child's cry but all ...