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Okay...here is my argument...the story is interesting and you are trying to demonstrate a certain mood to the text by using dialogues as a medium. However...when i read it, i ...

*hey, was this one in the storybooks?? okay.... the story is good and in the first part you had introduced the characters to the reader. However, whether or not this ...

hey, pudin...nice story... okay i will discuss here: plot narrative this plot is very intriguing and to be honest, i love it. Becasue there is a twist. You were able ...

hi... okay....when in first read the was a little confusing for me particularly the words, That it isn’t about some person who doesn’t even exist, but about him. either there ...

Firstly, the tory is nice but it lacks details...that is teh problem... Detail: You may have told the reader on the personality on the mother but not enough on the ...

twenty minutes minutes there are two minutes in this phrase. Description: the first part of the story impress me with its description particularly the first paragraph where the description made ...

okay, pudin...i'll review on two different things...(plot, characters ) plot okay, from what i read...the plot is abit like "happiness on a dystopian society" i've read a few of those ...

Hi..seemingly meaningless... i will comment this work with my best... It was in the walls. Sometimes she could hear rounds of short abrupt movements; scuffling and scurrying, dragging and scraping. ...

hi again...i promise what i promise yesterday okay...firstly, on the first paragraph, you got the mood of the story, thats good...you've describe some details such as A dagger. Small and ...

okay this is a good start but what i need here is that you must show what the characters are feeling of the character when he is going to board ...

Okay, the first thing ic an comment is that you tell the characters not show them. In other words, you must show that something is botehring the girl by the ...

I really like the story. The story consists of a good mood and the details especially the physical description of the character was well done. You have also describe the ...

It is a beautiful story you ahev grasp the mood of the story by doing excellent descriptions of teh character. though the description of teh actual character was a bit ...

i am not really into reviewing fantasy but i just saw thsi and got interested okay my first advice is that the story has a good pace with the action. ...

hi, i found thsi and think just to comment it first of all, i like the dialogue. there is a sense of realism in it my comment is that the ...