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Hellow! I agree with xKelle_Bellex. The song's packed to the brim with bitter emotion. It's very amusing, like a parody. But as a serious song, not so much. What did ...

Thanks so much for the reviews! By having Marcus being mentioned and then referring to him as "the opponent who had already won", I was under the impression it would ...

Thanks Critical_Point! I've redone the prologue, changed the story completely though. :oops:

Hi again, I found nothing wrong with this. It was awesome! I love the dialogue, and I love Amarion. :) Keep writing!

Hey there, I really really really liked this!! Lol. The vocabulary, your style, everything was just flawless. I haven't read Thirry's story. Is this a prologue to it, or...?

Hi, Thanks for the advice, I'll take it into account. :) Although there isn't really a Chapter One for this yet, the other chapters are earlier drafts.

Hi beckiw! I'm so flattered I was your first review, lol. :) But the plot and everything of this story is totally different now. Do you mind checking out the ...

happy-go-lucky: Thanks for pointing out the nitpicks, I'm glad you like the story. :) Reuben A: Haha, yeah I know where SA is. I'm from East Africa. :D You wouldn't ...

Thanks, guys! I really appreciate the critique. :)

The problem with Paolini is that he looked like a nerd when he published, and still looks and sounds like a nerd now. I don't see how looking like a ...

Very good! The whole story, the wording...everything kept me totally interested. You did a great job on the first and the last paragraph. Keep writing! :D

Just a little description? So I can build up a picture of an older version of her? :)

Yep, you could have described some more, but otherwise, I'm interested to see where this story goes. :)

It's pretty good. :)

Plotwise, it's ace, but not grammar-wise. I suggest using a Spelling and Grammar check if you have Microsoft Word. :D