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As both the people above me, I agree about the rhymes, but I still think it was a great poem :) Urm, just one thing confused me : I close ...

I really enjoyed the story, the main character was interesting and funny to read, as were the other characters :) I'm interested to see where you will take this! :D

I really do love this, it's very well written! :) You've obviously thought a lot about the descriptions you used, and it paid off because it was very effective. I'm ...

This was really great, the first paragraph had me hooked, I loved how you described things. The characters seem really great, and I interested to see where this goes! The ...

I really enjoyed the descriptions, especially the smaller ones such as the pound cake and the lemonade, I could imagine the situation. However, I agree with sealegs, a more elaborate ...