fireheartedkaratepup

...........I'm not sure how to review this. Are you turning this in, or are you simply performing it in front of the class? (And by "turning this in" I mean, ...

O.o People really don't like cliches on this site......... (I don't have a problem with them, usually. Unless they're really overdone. Sorry I didn't review earlier! I didn't have time ...

I had my doubts at first (I clicked on this for the "Guard Dog" but wasn't sure what to expect) but.......... I LOVE THIS. I think I'll go read the ...

I know this already has a lot of reviews (duh, it's featured, so that's kinda a given) but.................................. I LOVE THIS. Seriously, I think everyone can relate to this. I ...

Okay. In your dialogue, you need to word things in a more natural way. For example: "No. We can not we are already late.” Who talks like this? I'm not ...

This is pretty good, but I think it needs some polishing. Your wording is awkward in most of it. I did like this part: “Hmmm… A Serpiliameuels?” she suggested, a ...

Really, I just have the same comments I had for the first chapter. For instance, when you're trying to convey that the mom's getting up and leaving the table: "She ...

This is a fairly simplistic style of writing. Honestly, it just shows that you're young. (Sorry if that's offensive.) Be descriptive--use pretty words that mean the same thing as the ...

At first I was like, "Meh.... where's she going with this?" Then I read further and went "This is wonderful." Seriously, I love the way you word things, the pictures ...

May it be all a dream. Should this be "Maybe it's all a dream"? The wording sounds a bit strange. O.o Creepy......... So she can't trust anyone, huh? Is this ...

To anyone looking at the campus, the state, the country, the planet and the universe, she was invisible. Huh? I understand that for some reason, she's alone, but why would ...

Wooooooooooowwwwwww.............. this is amazing. Good job. One thing I don't get--you say the dragon cradled babies with his paw and warmed them with his maw, then say in the next ...

*frown* Is this the first chapter? I assumed so because of the (1), but I don't really know what's going on. I think you have something good here, but you ...

Yeah......every time I wanted to point something out, I saw that someone else had already done it. :p This was pretty good! It's rather beautiful and peaceful, and I like ...

Hmm, pretty good. I had a hard time getting into it (and I do have the ability to jump in mid-story) because it was all oc's though. The only way ...