find_the_reason

I like this prologue, it reminds me of a prologue in a book right before they cut to the epic battle or whats happening modern day, kinda like what you ...

I don't care about misspelled words or grammar unless it prevents me from understanding the story and you have no such problems there. Don't worry abouit having every last detail ...

I really liked this piece, the main character is more of a narrator than actually involved in the story in my opinion but hell your the author and you can ...

I liked this chapter but again there are some problems in here that have already been mentioned, but what i think you should do is finish the story as a ...

yeah i agree with everyone else, kinda i do believe you should have a chapter about whats happening with those who care about the lead character and what they are ...

I agree with Azila the basic plot of your story is solid but has a few holes in it, but I think you could remedy that easily. Well everyone else ...

Switching point of veiws was a good thing but only if oyu countinue with it, because if you didn't then it would be weird. The whole no women thing is ...

Again fast but in a slower way, but don't change your writing style cause it might ruin the story. There were some errors int he story where you forgot or ...

I like this story so far, but it still seems a little rushed but hey its yourt writing style. Umm, i like your descriptions but all character interactions bug me ...

I thought it was just the right length for a chapter in a book. The dragon was introduced a little fast but i think you kind of pulled it off. ...

I liked this story a lot. :) I felt that the battle on the ship should have been a little more focused on. You basically got that theres a battle ...

I thought it was good and if there is more I look forward to reading it. Definitly need to check out a thesaurus now and then but overall good. If ...