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Hey folks... here's the next part. (Don't forget to read the short scenes I posted the other day... otherwise you'll be confused. :wink: ) This'll be it for a while, ...

Thanks a bunch for critiquing everyone! It helps me sooo much. :D (Note: These are just some transition scenes.) ***** Sophie flung her purse down so forcefully that it just ...

I liked it. The descriptions were vivid and... that's all I can think of. :D Good work!

omg... Woah. Smilingly? Haha. Since when is smiling an adverb for "to cross"? Well, when you put it like that... :P Guess I should have paid more attention in grammar, ...

Hey folks! Thanks for reading and commenting! It's already making me more conscious of what I write. I edited the original post taking out a few sentences at the beginning ...

I thought it was good. I know my review isn't as in-depth as the others here... but the way you contrasted the short stanzas after the longer ones really made ...

I ditto the 'wow'! I liked the setup and everything, but the ending seemed a bit rushed. Will there be a part 2?

I liked it. A little more description would be nice... I think your characters and plot are interesting. Can't wait to see more.