fallenangel1239

Thank you. I get where you guys are coming from with saying that some parts didn't seem to fit well as song lyrics. You're right though, it's hard to know ...

I've changed it around a little to make it more like the song I wrote it as. I know that its short, you don't need to remind me of that. ...

I've got to agree. I like the mysteriousness in the poem, but it was a bit hard to follow. It flowed well for the most part though. There's a few ...

Thank you. I've both seen this and experienced it myself, so it wasn't a hard topic to write about. Although, writing it from Shaun's perspective kinda surprised me. It seems ...

Thank you. I do think I could have ended it better though. And made it flow easier. Heh, nice, I'm critiquing my own poem.

Thanks. I noticed that I made some spelling errors. Accidental. They are right on the paper, I just typed them up wrong and didn't realize it. Woops

Yeah. I wrote this on a wim and i wasn't really paying a whole lot of attension to editting. This was only my first draft. I'll probably post a second ...

thats pretty good. I can relate to it a lot. "knowing that 'we' may never be" that something that im sure a lot of people can relate to