Published August 1, 2008
I kind of like the mystery you placed in the poem. It give a sense of wonder. Anyway, I liked the poem although, it was kind of confusing.
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I've got to agree. I like the mysteriousness in the poem, but it was a bit hard to follow. It flowed well for the most part though. There's a few blips, but nothing that can't be fixed with a little editting. Nice job.