esoteric

I delighted in the darkness of this poem *evil laughter* It flows well, the words are haunting, and the ending was potent. The repetition within pretty much all your stanzas ...

Ooh, goodie. It rhymes. Usually rhyming sounds corny and juvenile, but you had some good moments... The "(in and out)" in parenthesis works for me. At first I found it ...

Eloquent. It read so smoothly. Completely enjoyable. The beginning- grabbed my attention with its simple sentences. Your descriptions are stunning. You leave images in my head, not just words. "bright

I like how you incorporate "white noise" and define it a bit differently than we normally would. "Whimpers, Of limbless children, strewn, (may want to capitalize S like you've done ...

A good play on "men made of glass." But the title "Stop-start" confused me as to how it's related... ? One of my favorite lines: "when I break I tend ...

Goosebumps. Some of your word choices are excellent. Some have great imagery. Some are very eloquent. "With all the colors that adorn you Like roses and violets, and lavenders" "Amid ...

There is much to be gained from simplicity. Hoo-rah, for a good and interesting topic for a poem. Most of the rhyming is smooth, and most of it has a ...

this makes me horribly sad as it brings up some dark thoughts of my own... :( *self-pity intermission* you have a lot of run-on sentences where a period would work ...