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Hey, Tylexle! Lupa here for a review! :D Welcome to YWS. Let's get started. 1) This poem is lovely, first of all. The message is very true. But it's also ...

Heiyo, Dracula! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's get started... 1) "As they joined the que of bubbly children," Here, you spelled queue wrong. :) It should be spelled ...

Heya, featherstone! Lupa here for a late review! :D Let's begin... 1) "He slipped a ritual dagger made of what legend said was made of dragonfang and handed it to ...

Heya, Falconer! Lupa here for a nice review! :D Let's start, shall we? 1) "He had up since three am and was fully dressed, as he was most nights, but ...

Heyo, Hattable! Lupa here for a shiny review! :D Let's begin. 1) "His father always fretted about its condition, fearing it would fall apart and rain down from the sky, ...

Hey, Caitlin! I've gotta make this one short, so... :D Let's start! 1) "It didn't help that I had to fold myslef forward" I'm sure it's a typo, but "myslef" ...

Hey, DivergentDemigod! Lupa here for a shiny review! :D Let's jump right in... 1) "our names engraved on those trunks permanently unlike us." The last line of your first stanza ...

Heya, Queenie! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's start... 1) Throughout this entire poem, your adjectives are slightly cliche / overused. You use words like lovely, pretty, beautiful, etc. ...

Hey, sapphireluna! Lupa here for a review. :D Let's begin... 1) Your first sentence provides way too much information for it too be comfortable. You manage to cram all of ...

Hey, BlueAfrica! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's jump right in. 1) "Several who appeared to have been nodding off a moment ago were not sitting up straight," This ...

Hey, Steggy! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's begin. 1) "He knew it was silly, rehashing a wound that he longed forgotten but his brain had other plans." I ...

Hey, VintageGalaxy! Lupa here for a review! :D This looks like a pretty long piece, so let's get started. 1) "I brushed the hair out of my sisters frightened eyes." ...

Hey, anngelalu! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's start. 1) Your first line could use some work. "simple as is" just doesn't get your point across very clearly. Perhaps ...

Hey, BlueAfrica! The whole chapter was pretty good, and I pretty much had nothing to complain about there. At the end, I think it would be better if you made ...

Heya, Brownbomd! Lupa for a shiny review! :D Let's begin... 1) "But, unbeknownst to the Indians, their prey was a notorious Colonel, a leader of devoted soldiers. And he was ...