endless_secrets

Well written and intriguing but I simply exited without commenting the first time because she dies at the end. A prologue is supposed to make you want to read the ...

Hello! You have something really interesting here, your descriptions are immaculate, not to over the top I think, but almost poetic in a way. I found only one mistake. No ...

Hey there! I think you've got something interesting here, but I agree with the telling and not really showing, also I found myself skipping over some parts because and sections ...

Great first chapter, i just wish it was longer. You have great use of characterization, and your characters most definately seem real. Great job with the male perspective, i could ...

Hello I just read all chapters up until this one, and I must say that they are all very origional and I enjoyed them all. I particularily like the names ...

That was very interesting and i think it is fine at the length that it is, prefaces and prologues shouldn't be too long. But anyways, I found little to no ...

Hey there. i really enjoyed this fist bit, it was very descriptive and full of feeling although i also would have like to see some motive for the suiside, but ...

Wow. That was just wow. I loved that chapter and the one before that and the one before that lol. You really are seriously talented. Just a few quick things, ...

hey there! So just a few comments, i love your plot, have since the beginning! You have to watch out for grammer and spelling mistakes and you have to choose ...

I really enjoyed your preface and part of chapter one, I do like your idea of the Elementals as this is an idea i played around with myself :) unlike ...

I found this first chapter to be very interesting. I am very curious to see what comes of the ring, and a good writer makes you curious. (Yes that was ...

Wow, that was amazing, sorry i haven't criticed in a while, my laptop broke. :( But i just read everything i missed and i must say extremely well done! You ...

Wow, i really like where this is going, but i did spot many mistakes, so i will do my best to correct them. I walked into the study and shut ...

Sorry i don't have super great review for you, complete with editing, I was just so absorbed in the story that if there were any mistakes i must have missed ...

Hey there slammmoth! I said i owed you one and i do, but honestly there weren't any mistakes that i caught other than the slight ones that were already pointed ...