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Thanks for the comment...I'm glad that you find the story unique, cause that's what I was aiming for. =D

As for the rest of the preface, I'm not too thrilled about it myself, but I just wanted to put that last line in there somehow, and this was the only way I could think of lol

Hello.
Firstly, you have a very unique story opening here. I cannot say that I have read anything like it before - not that this is a bad thing, far from it infact.
The one line

I fall in love with the wind.

Well, I think all the corrections have already been pointed out so I will do some encouraging!

I fall in love with the wind.

Thank you everyone for your reviews, and for catching those little mistakes in there that I probably never would have seen XD

I really enjoyed your preface and part of chapter one, I do like your idea of the Elementals as this is an idea i played around with myself unlike Nariel I did like how you began, i have read a few books that started this way and they all turned out to be really good, I also think it does tell you a lot about the book, but you have to deliver on everything you said or else the beginning will be no good. But overall a great start i hope you keep going with this idea.
PM me when you have mor eout please!

I cringed each time I was forced too

Hello! I have a couple things I want to point out to you, but your story made me laugh (in the good way). I thought it was very sharp and witty and just well put together. But, like I said before, there are a couple things I want to point out.

Well then, enough of that. If the above is the type of story you’re after, please save yourself the trouble and return it to the shelf---I’d prefer not to waste you time, for most of us have so little as it is these days. This is not that kind of novel----a false, over-sugared mass of boredom, nor is it an excessive flow of disjointed dramas. It is a true, solid account of an actual romance. My romance.

Don’t be disappointed if you were one of those after tears and drama---like most, my story has its share. Unlike most, however, my story is strikingly different. For one thing, I am not your average romance-story girl---submission has never quite been my forte, and I don’t perform too well in the role of “damsel in distress”. And for another thing, I don’t fall for an irresistibly handsome warrior type. I don’t turn head-over-heels for that perfect, wealthy Mr. Right whose eye I have been oddly fortunate to catch. And I don't fall for the wildly unobtainable guy who I somehow manage to obtain in the end.

I fall in love with the wind.

Vita had found a bush, and she raked it through her hair for the third session that morning.