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I really liked this. It really put an image into my head. I can imagine the stage even though you never literally described it. I agree with ohhewwo, though, on ...

This seemed softer than your other stuff, not that it was bad. It was really good. The really long last line... is that a trademark style or something of yours? ...

Yeah... can't give much critique... Really nice job, as usual.

For "Wind," I don't think you should put "wind" again in the stanza, since you are describing it. It is like explaining what a words mean and using the word ...

It was okay except for this part: "It really made me sad I blamed it all on you not me I acted really bad " The "sad" and "bad" rhyme ...

There was a typo: "Where the oor is sober" I think you mean poor. It wasn't really my type of poetry, but it was written fine.

I didn't really like the parentheses at the end, especially the last one. It was okay, besides that.

Your poetry will develop the more you read other peoeple's works. Critique will help you a lot and the more you write, the easier it will come. I suggest reading ...

The capitalization in front of every line bugged me, but that's your style. The poem itself was hurried, yet that sets the mood of the poem. I liked it.

Heh, thanks... my other stuff isn't as funny though, sorry.

I'm guessing surreality (the poem) was the result of this story? Just a guess... The story was nice. It wasn't a very hard read, but it had depth, still. I ...

I liked the last two lines.. but I didn't really like the whole angel thing, even though it was the point of the poem. The angel part made me think, ...

Having all the first letters of the words capitalized bothered me a lot. It seemed like a corny saying you find on cards, because of the rhyming. Like niteowl said, ...

I didn't really get the purpose, but the words kind of stood out to me, I guess, even though it confused me.

LOL HAHA this was HILARIOUS. I hope you don't even have a little thought that you are a bad writer though... but yeah this was really funny.