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First off... doesn't the meet the rhthym of the road I think you mean doesn't meet the rhythm of the road. I liked the last two stanzas of the poem ...

There were many good ideas in this, but you would repeat the same ideas, which made it tiring to read. The idea of being frozen in her beauty was an ...

Hmm... It was interesting. I liked the ending... Typos/spelling errors [or what I think are typos/spelling errors]: Slabskik and two other orks were thrown from their war buggy with an ...

Haha! Nice! Not as creepy as you made it out to be, but maybe it's because you told me about it beforehand. Who knows who here really is this man? ...

Grammar is something to work on. Also, it seems like you weren't really sure of what you were writing about, as if, like Areida said, you weren't sure where it ...

Persephone of the underwo, I'm sorry you had a hard time at school, but frankly I think this was pretty mediocre writing. For one thing, it was a bit blunt. ...

there is a pale of water in my basement Do you mean 'pail' or do you really mean 'pale'? Seriously, I can't tell... This seemed like a personal poem, yet ...

This was very different from a lot of poems. Typo: "Where are you off to, red baloon?" Balloon. I liked it. However, it didn't seem very complete, like it was ...

I didn't really get this... not at all... but I guess it's more of a personal situation... or am I just stupid? Anyway, the second stanza didn't really seem to ...

He had a abrupt headache all of a sudden, which clouded his thoughts and prevented him thinking clearly – like a fog had hidden his brain and it wasn’t accessible, ...

Heh, that made me laugh... was it supposed to? :? Anyway, it was a bit cheesy because of the rhyming and such, but it was light-hearted (I think) so the ...

"Those eyes are like laser bolts, like knives sticking into me, like poisonous darts. At least in high school there's a uniform." You were mentioning the hair before this, and ...

I like this song a lot better than your other ones. The metaphors were a bit weird, but they were original. I'm not much for literal songs, but this was ...

The lines were a bit forced to rhyming, such as: "Now she's picked it up he's left her but she's fine with that He was a dirty rat " and ...

The sentences were kind of weird. You would say something in one sentence, then you would restate a main point in the sentence before in the next sentence. Does that ...