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This is pretty amazing, in my book. I've read it quite a few times and I still can't really think of anything to say. Though, yes, it could be written ...

Hiya Kafka. I agree with Lumi's comments; as I said in another poem, your words are often blocked by your abundance of commas. I was thinking that perhaps, even with ...

Great poem! There are a couple of things that could be nitpicked a bit, but that would be boring to type out because they're almost irrelevant to the overall message ...

deep into her arm, emptying all the chambers, into my thirsty mouth. I throw the devoured corpse into the road, and contemplate what will I have, I picked out lines ...

I thought that, overall, this was a great piece. Your ideas were not only a constant stream throughout the poem, but a connection as well. You mentioned different details earlier ...

Here's the thing: you've always been good to me. Always. Not just good, but great. I've never not been impressed (terrible wording, I know, I know) by something you write. ...

Evening, Kafka. First off, your descriptions are definitely changing. :P I was pleasantly surprised (and slightly curious) at the detail that poured into this. Now, while this is very detailed, ...

Dark, The fingernails of shadow Scrape at the window. While I love these lines, I have to admit, it's a pretty common image to the point where it's sort of ...

Shall I throw pennies in a well, making magic wishes? you may want to use something different here, such as "wasting them on wishes." what you have is good, though ...

I like your writing style in all of the work I've read so far. Your language is definitely different, but I like it. Anyway. Splitting this into thirds because I've ...

Ha. For a first attempt, it sure as hell is better than anything I came up with when I was starting out. Definitely keep writing! :) And great poem you've ...

First off, I have a question: why is it that some poets capitalize the first letter of every line? I don't mean I have a problem with it, it's just ...

Haha. The topics are a little cliche, but I like these poems all the same. One thing I'd like to say is that I really like that you used bigger ...

You've got a great image going with this piece - I really like the portion about the dreams, with "waking sleep." Good contrast of words. My only suggestion is to ...

Hiya Coral. I don't have many issues with this one (most of them have been pointed out/fixed, so yeah), but there are a few things I'd like to point out. ...