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Knight Dragon, here to review! Ooh, titles. Welcome to my favorite random generators . That site should have something of what you're looking for, and definitely some other helpful writing ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: hides away any form of sun The diction of "away any" doesn't flow very well. The tongue just stumbles over it. And even for ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: Jeremy Kyle’s voice muffled by the remote... The way that was worded, along with your verb choice, made the poem a little choppy there. ...

Knight Dragon, here to review as requested! Technical: "That is the miracles on the inside and not the outside." Miracles should probably just be 'miracle.' It sounds kind of odd ...

Knight Dragon, here to spaz first, then review. YAAAAAYYY!!! More! All right, review(-ish) things, here we go. Well, it definitely has a different feel than the previous one. And it's ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! "Streams flow at the seams Nothing my iron can’t handle" That pair of lines is slightly confusing. The first line, by itself, is fine, but ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "Without any caution please proceed! But how much can I receive?" Reading over those two lines, the rhythm felt off in the first, and ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful review day! Technical: "The scribe was not even looking at him, “boy, cut me some wood,” he held out the cane, upon ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful review day! Technical: "Maria was bored; Ben was thinking and he didn’t want to be disturbed." Stylistically, I would recommend removing the ...

Knight Dragon, here to review as requested! Technical: "Now it was her turn, her fragile frame pressed up in a crouch, her back damp against the mould, choking on the ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "Louis guessed the little man must of eaten" That should be "must have eaten." "Louis Bekker’s mind was elsewhere." Question: shouldn't we already know ...

Knight Dragon, here to review. It saddens me when people take a misconception about a group's beliefs and draw erroneous conclusions because they didn't check what that group actually believes. ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "In her hands was a single strand of brown hair; the girl was blonde." Stylistic recommendation: change the semi-colon to a period and capitalize ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "...their children while coupled held hand and smiled." Slight typo there. "couples," not "coupled." "The small girl laughed at this before turning around and

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical: "a single strength from several's might" The possessive is unnecessary, and it broke the reading flow for me. I had to stop and reread ...