dragonfphoenix

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, on the technical side I only found two minor things. First: "Sagging tents mean knights poking up...", shouldn't the "mean" be "meant" to ...

I thought this was going fine up until the third to last paragraph. You make it sound like he finally tried to do what he'd set out to, but then ...

Knight Dragon, here to review. Technical first: "checking her cell phones interface. One from Anna, her best friend, Jessi, the girl she hated." This sentence was written a little awkwardly. ...

Knight Dragon, here to continue my review. Well, let's get down to business. "Elliana muttered, and with a swift movement the dagger stuck through the cement wall and the eyes ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, I was going to show all the little things, but there's just too much to be advantageous. So... On to the technical: "Yeah, ...

Very interesting poem. It seems this could almost be read from the perspective of a forget-me-not flower in a meadow that someone came and saw one day, and then never ...

I'd have to agree with rainbowcabbit \/ about the making yourself die. I've never heard that done before in a song. But other than that, this does nothing for me ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical things: "If they'd have lifted" should be "If they'd lifted". If you spelled it out, "if they had have lifted", it's grammatically incorrect. The ...

All right, review time from Knight Dragon! Well, this has a lot of unanswered questions. 1) What could have been worse? 2) What is Ren too good for? 3) Where ...

Hi there! Knight Dragon here to review. Well, I liked the content of this poem, and it seemed to flow pretty well, but I keep wanting to change that first ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Technical first: "The tears they poured was not right" has a disagreement in subject+verb number; it should be "tears...were" not "tears...was". "she’s trying to still

Knight Dragon, here to review! The only punctuation suggestions I have are "But for now/I wait with them" should have a comma where the slash is (that slash indicates line ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! All right, punctuation was the biggest thing for me. I felt the first stanza had very odd punctuation, and it didn't seem to direct the ...

Knight Dragon of the Knights of the Green Room, here to review! First piece of advice: change your formatting. ALL CAPS FOR HOWEVER MANY LINES YOU HAVE HERE IS VERY ...

Knight Dragon of the Knights of the Green Room, here to review! Hey, welcome to YWS!!! I'm guessing this is your first time attacking formatting, so I'm just going to ...