delilahlovve

So, you're story was acceptable. It did seem like the scene layout wasn't certain. In the first paragraph you say that it was cold that night then later it says ...

This was not what I expected after reading the first sentence. But of course, your intro was perfect. The way the main character barely speaks, makes you want to continue ...

I actually read the whole thing..which is great! It kept me interested, wanting to know what happens. With a tragic car accident and someone who's uninterested in their year long ...

This seems like an interesting story. Like everyone else, is this your prologue or intro? My only suggestion is comma use. Make sure places you place them, need them. I ...

Well, at least you write too much! Sometimes I can't find enough words. The best thing about being that kind of writer is you can always reread your stories or ...

I like this story. At first, I was confused about the interaction of characters, trying to piece together and see whom said what. Unless you're going to mention Sasha later ...

To begin, the plot was very confusing. The names and who the main character was, was unclear and described unusually. Well, I like the plot, it's interesting. However, I feel ...

Hey.. So, in the story, I couldn't really tell but I think you wanted to write in past tense. You seemed to sometimes jump from past tense and then present ...

The story was slow, but still reminded me of when I was that naive. I'd say to double check your spellings and words, in the beginning you say "patients" but ...