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Exactly! Glad someone understood this :).History is always written by the victors, that for ages we thought the celts were a savage people etc. So, yep you were right :).

"Villain who likes to laugh..." Judging by Paolini's plagiaristic track record, this is the new villain: The Joker. Wait--no, the Jokar. There. Now it's original. The Jokar is a laughing ...

I don't know what to think about this. The meaning of it just flew by me. Mind explaining for me what's it about. I can't say much more, it kinda ...

Awww..c'mon..don't you think you guys are being a little hard on Paolini? Everyone KNOWS he's not even near being as awesome a writer as Tolkien, or CS Lewis. But cut ...

Love this poem, this could have some puntuation to make it flow better. Other than that, I really like this acrostic, it's very beautifully written. Can't wait to see some ...

It's not exactly terrible. People on here just complain a ton. It does do the whole cliche thing with Nerds, but that's actually the only real problem I see here... ...

Okay now to reveal who it is. The whole based on hope nothing else. You're right about it being a girl. In fact it's my fiancee. it's about how much ...

Oh come on and try. No body has ever guessed and since you commented back I'll give ya a bash.

Hehe, no one can guess correctly. XD. Come on is it that hard to guess what it's about. Demeter: I had the lily bit like that originally, but changed it ...

Didn't exactly get this, but it's wonderful imagery with exellent and intense langauge techniques. I can't comment on the subject since I can't quite understand it. Overall: This earns a ...

Viola! When I was rewriting this poem, yet again for the third time I realized another reason why my poem was not easy to digest. There were two different things ...

For Gadi's Contest. I sit on the cool marble floor, perplexed, My emotions aroused by the resplendent moon gazing down at me. The stars maliciously twinkling, Do they know the ...

Glad you're seeing my point. I'll say nothing more on my review of this poem. But I'd be willing to read the rewrite of this Mizz. Good luck VSN

Well here I go again. (I hate double posting) My main beef was it's so telling why not use a metaphor or personify it. Give us a feeling don't tell ...

God I still love this, if ya ever come back. Add in punctuation then it'll be perfect. I wish so wish I could star this maybe getting it bumped up ...