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Hey, I'll review your story soon, but just one side note: why don't you post the second chapter as a seperate topic?? It might attract more attention that way. Just ...

Thank you for the review! I should have the next part posted soon but I must admit that I keep forgetting to >.>

Thanks for the commentS!! I'll be editing this piece, soon :) XxxDo

Hey, you Here's another review!! YAYS! :P Anyway, you know the drill, the review is in the attachment. Hope it's useful!! XxxDo

Thanks for the comments!! Shadepelt: Thanks, I agree, I should work on defining the characters more. WannaBeAuthor: Thanks!! XxxDo

Amazing. Well done. More in the attachment :D XxxDo

Hey there, Here's the review of yet another magnificent piece of writing :P Xxx

Thank you!!! Sorry about the length of the story, I have a very hard to suppress tendency to write in too much detail :wink: I'm editing it, big time, right ...

Here you go :) I really loved the story!!! Review in the attachment Xxx Do

Thanks !! Haha :P XxxDo Ps. Want me to check yours out??? Then we can give eachother bad advice haha :wink:

Thanks for the review!!! Nearly died when I read it, though :P Xxx

Thanks for the comments, all of you :D Xxx

:) Thanks for the comments :) Xxx

Thanks for the comments everyone :) (especially JF :wink: cause when you say detailed, you really mean detailed!! Awesome :D) XxxDo

Haha :P It says that a short story called Burnt Memories, which isn't this one, is the prologue to this Burnt Memories, chapter one. Doesn't say this one's a short ...