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Heya JF :D I'm reviewing your story as we speak so expect a crit sometime soon! I'm also procrastinating so whenever my parents walk in I make a run for ...

Heya This was really well-written, you've displayed the emotions and feelings perfectly without getting redundant. Great job. I think the other people pointed out the only nit-picks I saw as ...

Heya Here I am again, commenting on your work :D 3rd review in two days haha :wink: Continue this story, its wonderful! You have a really mature writing voice shining ...

Hey :D This was a fun read !! You have a thing for interestings ways of describing situations, people, objects, anything really. It seems really real, like you're making the ...

Hey there :D I enjoyed that ! I'd love to read the next part of this story, its way nice. Hope my comments are useful to you. Oh, and its ...

Oh, and let me know if you edit it, I'd love to critique it again!! Are you serious about the left-handed thing? Whoa the world is more disturbed than I ...

Hey there :D Hope my critique helps ! I really enjoyed the prologue, so I must say: continue this you've got something good going! Who is the umbrella friend ?? ...

Hey :D WELCOME TO YWS!! Also, welcome to the wonderful world of writing in general! If you need any help, PM me! Just wanted to let you know that I've ...

Heeey :D I like this story, its good! Just make sure you space it properly, because when writing is this close together a lot of people are demotivated from reading ...

Though a tad too short it is really touching, and displays the emotion in a clear way. Try to read through it a few times, and maybe say sentences out ...

HAHA !! take a photo of your garden :wink: I know, boredom is a dangerous thing, isnt it? Be careful with your spelling, make sure you take the time to ...

That was pretty funny :D Sarcasm rules ! The other repliers have basically covered all real critisism, so there's nothing for me to do except say that I like it ...

This is a nice prologue :D I like the way you describe the man, with the adam's apple, and how he didn't fight back. It's some good descriptive writing! The ...

I agree with the two repliers before me about the coldness of Megan. Have a flashback, for example, of her and her boyfriend before the life-changing diagnosis. She's human, and ...

O M G really true! I hate it when you want to write but can't! it annoys me so much it makes my mood all :evil: lol my poor family ...