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Icaruss: Lol, I'm glad at least someone got that it's a flashback. Yeah, I know it's not finished. It's a long and complicated story. Hmm... I guess the flashback is ...

Thanks again for the comments, guys. xGraceex: Thanks, love. I'm glad you liked it :D I agree with you about the age thing. The law can't factor in everyone's individual ...

Lol, of all the things I thought this might get compared to, Twilight certainly wasn't the top of my list :D Disturbing, yes. Reality often is. Hmm... perhaps I've posted ...

Thanks for reading. :) The flashback is relevant in the whole scheme of things, but I understand that it doesn't feel that way. This story has a circular structure, where ...

Wow, was it really that bad? EEk, perhaps it should be chucked into the 'Do Not Continue' bin. The dividing paragraph in bold actually marks the beginning of a flash ...

Back again! :smt109 Hmm, still big blocks of text here. :smt119 Split your paragraphs in half again. It just makes it easier to read. Now, to my review! Sarah has ...

Thanks so much for your reviews, guys :D Olivia 1987: Thanks for reading! Going back over this, I did make Jade seem quite a lot younger, something I'll correct ASAP. ...

Aw, you had me on the verge of tears this time round, Ash. I'm not sure why. Maybe it's the combination of all the little bits you've changed in part ...

Thanks heaps for your comments guys. I did a bit of a re-write and I'm trying to make things clearer, but I have a feeling I'm a few more edits ...

Thanks for commenting everyone. I really appreciate it :) I guess in my wanting to make this first part fast and vivid, I completely skipped over descriptions of Raewyn's attacker. ...

Aw, thanks so much! I'm glad you you enjoyed it :)

Thanks for pointing those out. I've always used single quotation marks as I find it doesn't matter, so long as you're consistent. And the bit where she is speaking incoherantly ...

Thanks for reading everyone. I'm glad I've finished this story. I'd love to hear your feedback as I'm still a little unsure as to whether some parts worked or not

Thanks for your comments guys. I really appreciate it. I ended up getting a B+ :-)

Thanks to everyone who has read this far. There is only one more installment to go after this (I think!). I really appreciate your comments and critiques :-)