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dancingmangos

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Death

    This is short but good. It's got a good impact to it. \ There were a few punctuation nitpicks, like this: as I lifted off the floor , being resurrected ...

    Sep 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I give in ideas

    I like this :) It's got a serious, slightly nostalgic edge to it that I really appreciate. I don't exactly understand what you're trying to say, though. This seems like ...

    Aug 31, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: They Whisper

    I like this. I'm not really understanding who "they" are, but maybe it's better that way. At first I thought you were talking about schizophrenia, but then at the end ...

    Aug 31, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Dr. Gamble

    I really like two of the ideas you brought to light: "All I ever wanted became everything I fear", and that knowledge changes things tremendously. I strongly adhere to these ...

    Aug 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: For Luna's Eye's Only...

    This was sad but very beautiful. It had great nostalgia to it, and I especially liked it because of two things: I love the feeling of the cold breeze at ...

    Aug 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Deleted (I dont know how to delete on this new design of YWS)

    I have a boyfriend that I like so so so much, and this is just so perfect :D I can especially relate to the dork part; he's so dorky sometimes, ...

    Aug 30, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The night I died (did I really die?)

    Wow...really powerful. It has the perfect amount of confusion and mystery added to it. I really liked how I wasn't sure what was going on throughout the story, but then ...

    Aug 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Road to Nowhere (Chapter One)

    This is one of the best stories I've read on this site in a while :) It was actually interesting after the first three sentences. Okay, so I thought this ...

    Aug 29, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Yellow Sheets

    This is perfection!! The right length, depth, thought sequence. I especially liked how the girl doesn't talk, since it reinforces the idea that she's done for, has no more life ...

    Jun 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Cancer

    I think that anyone can relate to this poem, because I don't think there is anyone in the world that hasn't been affected by cancer in some way, no matter ...

    Jun 26, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: My Hero?

    This is officially one of my favorite princess stories :) It has the right mix of romance, mystery, and heartbreak. A few nitpicks, though: 1) I was thrown off by ...

    Jun 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Crucifix is a Sex Toy

    My dad's side of the family is Catholic, except him, so I got what you were saying within the poem and the comment explaining yourself. Also, I am Agnostic and ...

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Ice Ambassadors: Chapter 1 (Edits!)

    My God, this is one of the best novels/stories I have ever read. I'm not exaggerating, either. It's right up there with Harry Potter, for me. I honestly can't find ...

    May 30, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Their Apocalypse

    This is so human, yet a more complex human than I could ever attempt to create. Your writing and the insight into the human soul is amazing, and I'm excited ...

    May 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hey, Boy!

    So very relatable, as you already said. I love it! It seemed a bit short and lacking in depth. Yes, it's a short poem, but maybe different words could create ...

    May 29, 2011


Russets and tangerine shades of old gold flushing the very outside edge of the senses ... deep shining ochres, burnt umber and parchments of baked earth—reflecting on itself and through itself, filtering the light.
— Guildenstern (Rosencrantz & Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard)