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Re: Death
This is short but good. It's got a good impact to it. \ There were a few punctuation nitpicks, like this: as I lifted off the floor , being resurrected ...
Sep 1, 2011 -
Re: I give in ideas
I like this :) It's got a serious, slightly nostalgic edge to it that I really appreciate. I don't exactly understand what you're trying to say, though. This seems like ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: They Whisper
I like this. I'm not really understanding who "they" are, but maybe it's better that way. At first I thought you were talking about schizophrenia, but then at the end ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Dr. Gamble
I really like two of the ideas you brought to light: "All I ever wanted became everything I fear", and that knowledge changes things tremendously. I strongly adhere to these ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: For Luna's Eye's Only...
This was sad but very beautiful. It had great nostalgia to it, and I especially liked it because of two things: I love the feeling of the cold breeze at ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Deleted (I dont know how to delete on this new design of YWS)
I have a boyfriend that I like so so so much, and this is just so perfect :D I can especially relate to the dork part; he's so dorky sometimes, ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: The night I died (did I really die?)
Wow...really powerful. It has the perfect amount of confusion and mystery added to it. I really liked how I wasn't sure what was going on throughout the story, but then ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Road to Nowhere (Chapter One)
This is one of the best stories I've read on this site in a while :) It was actually interesting after the first three sentences. Okay, so I thought this ...
Aug 29, 2011 -
Re: The Yellow Sheets
This is perfection!! The right length, depth, thought sequence. I especially liked how the girl doesn't talk, since it reinforces the idea that she's done for, has no more life ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Cancer
I think that anyone can relate to this poem, because I don't think there is anyone in the world that hasn't been affected by cancer in some way, no matter ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: My Hero?
This is officially one of my favorite princess stories :) It has the right mix of romance, mystery, and heartbreak. A few nitpicks, though: 1) I was thrown off by ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: The Crucifix is a Sex Toy
My dad's side of the family is Catholic, except him, so I got what you were saying within the poem and the comment explaining yourself. Also, I am Agnostic and ...
Jun 19, 2011 -
Re: Ice Ambassadors: Chapter 1 (Edits!)
My God, this is one of the best novels/stories I have ever read. I'm not exaggerating, either. It's right up there with Harry Potter, for me. I honestly can't find ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Their Apocalypse
This is so human, yet a more complex human than I could ever attempt to create. Your writing and the insight into the human soul is amazing, and I'm excited ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: Hey, Boy!
So very relatable, as you already said. I love it! It seemed a bit short and lacking in depth. Yes, it's a short poem, but maybe different words could create ...
May 29, 2011
