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She feared if she called out she would only draw the things attention, *thing's Things is the plural of thing, thing's is possessive. Emily’s eye’s slipped closed, *eyes Finely , ...

Look Out Of The Window. Can You See The Sea? Look Out Of The Window. Can You See The Future? Look Out Of The Window (period) Can You See The ...

Wow. I'm not really religious, and I'm quite clueless when it comes to these things, but this was beautiful. I almost wish that it was longer, but maybe the short ...

All that was left was a mess from strangers who’s come here for shelter. *who'd The shadows are tugging at my body, and they’re scraping my skin. Towards the hurricanes. ...

suggestions / grammatical errors comments Not the kind of fear that made me wake up and cry, waking my parents up I would suggest changing one of the bolded words. ...

"Remember when I told you today will be special?" This is a very ungrammatical sentence. If you meant to make the person sound like that, my apologies, but if not, ...

"Rick-" Anna started to say, but Rick was too engulfed in his topic. Reads a bit awkward. Maybe try something like "but Rick ignored her" or "before Rick cut her ...

I felt the mild, comforting sunlight warming my damp body. I lay there for a few seconds more, absorbed in bliss. I opened my eyes and felt a sharp, stinging ...

Shh? (period instead) Listen. That was really my only nitpick. Hm, this had a good message, and when I first began to read, I thought the 'Shh. Listen." sounded quite ...

blue- suggestions green- comments red- grammatical Paula called from the Kitchen. I watched the car Not sure why you capitalized kitchen. at the photographs of grand churches and those ghastly ...

Samantha. My name is Samantha. My name is Samantha Kendall. My name is Samantha Jane Kendall (period) With m y eyes still closed, they began repeating over and over in ...

Yes, a tad confusing, but that's alright, some writing isn't meant to make sense. As long as you know what you're talking about... (I hope you do) I nodded, struggling ...

I Can't Believe I Go Again Get t ing Hurt Get t ing Cheated On Not This Time "Getting" has two t's. Two. Hurt You Think I'll Forgive You Forgive ...

I know this is an older story, but I felt like reviewing it anyways, so I hope it helps! It was the start of the second semester of the school, ...

The only nitpick that was obvious to me was this one: It might have been the fucken hand gun, (no comma) they pointed at my head.” And the 'fucken' didn't ...