condirant

I really loved this -for many reasons. You did a great job in taking on a different style of writing than most teenagers do. It's much more metaphorical, and flows ...

I love this. It's simply amazing, a great example of a true heartbreak. The metaphors you use seem well thought-out, even if they did come naturally to mind. Keep writing. ...

Wow, this is amazing. There's only one part that kind of confused me: tell separate sad, but happy, tales. I know there's a word for this, but I can't place ...

Amazing story, great twist at the end. I really liked it and can't wait until you finish your next story, I'm sure it'll be just as good if not better. ...

Overall it's good, I really like the beginning. I'm going to point out some little things I think you could improve. :) I was lying, and a second ago, face ...

That was interesting, you could really turn it into something neat. Maybe a novella, you should definitely go for it. :) (let us know when you finish another chapter) ~Devon.

Very good, not many people can write poetry that well and also convey a message. :) For, how can anything last when nothing lasts forever? -Makes you think. I like ...