chuff88

w00t for streams of consciousness... I agree with chairman, except: Your logic is almost too abstract. Alright, it's in other fiction , so you can't be talking from your own ...

hmmm, shadowtwit... he is supposed to be omnipresent, so arguably he is within us. And if all answers lie in him, and he is within us, then all answers are ...

"thin, bloody heap. The heap..." - You could just swap 'the heap' for it: "Thin bloody heap. It was..." blond in line 2 should be blonde - something we got ...

Purely as a small point, he could here the iranians running through the trees after Mistake: 'here', here, should be 'hear'. (I couldn't resist that. Sorry.) One is a verb, ...

I like it. Is it part of anything longer? On to the crit.... If you ever do that again, I wont come for you Should be won't. You get it ...

On a random tangent, did you know where the phrase "It was a dark and stormy night" comes from originally? Ironically, it was penned by the great Bulwer-Lytton (try wikipedia...) ...

I liked the style - and the way you used 'u' instead of 'you' at some points. I'm not sure if that was deliberate, but it makes the fact that ...

I really liked it. In a weird way, it reminded me of puppets - the way you kept identifying the professor as only the professor and the boy as only ...

I really liked his cat. I thought you portrayed his relationship with his pet (as a guy living alone) really well. As well, I though he was quite a believeable ...