chrisevo98

Hey, chrisevo98 with a review. Let's get right into it. With the first paragraph you use "It burnt," and, "They burnt," I'm presuming that the pronouns refer to her lungs. ...

This is really well written, and I your style of writing is really easy to read. Your spelling is fine as far as I can tell. There are a few ...

Mistakes I found. "I didn’t matter how many lectures she gave me" should be "It didn't..." "I had power of her" should be "... power over her." "I had found ...

I thought this story was great. It was incredibly well written, the dialogue seemed natural and realistic. There weren't many grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. Although "In my mind, I ...

I really liked this story. It was generally well written and I don't think I saw any grammatical or spelling errors. The only problem was the dialogue. It seemed unnatural, ...

The name Max Eve Smith I dislike, it's the middle name, it's a females name and for a man to have a girls name isn't right, even a middle name. ...

Apart from the complete disregard to any scientific evidence or proof this was good, I actually enjoyed this. The dialogue was good and felt natural. I like your style of ...

I liked the beginning of this chapter, with the cell building and the DNA coding and stuff. But after the boy was... born?... the story just became really confusing. I'm ...