chocolatechipmuffin

I liked it, I got an image of a boy/man who has no direction in his life, whose goals have all gone away. You do need to put in some ...

It had a nice flow and feel, needed more meaning. With a little work, you could get some emotion into it, but right now, it's just a nice-sounding set of ...

I liked the last stanza, too, it was more original. It seemed like the last stanza was almost a different poem, it didn't fit well with the other two. The ...