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This was really good. I don't read sci-fi or anythin, so I have no complaints about the plot or anything. I really liked it. Is there more up? I'll go ...

Hey. This is really creepy. Like, really creepy. The night was still- quiet. "To quiet if you ask me." The girl muttered to herself as she walked the lonely night. ...

Yeah, this belong in Other Fiction, not in Welcome, but as I can't move it, I'll just get on with a review. I really like this story. It's just the ...

First of all I want to say that this story just keeps getting better and better. I'm really liking it so far. I liked how he was dreaming in the ...

Okay, this was short and I found it quite dry. And you called it The Debate, saying it was an argument between the author and editor! This was no argument. ...

Hey. Just repeating what kitty said, it's polite to critique at least two pieces of writing before posting your first. And then when you do post, it's best to double ...

Yay!!!! WooHooo!!!!! You don't know how long I've been waiting for this chapter. Please please please please please don'tt take so long with the next one. I might die if ...

A flash of lightning momentarily illuminates the landscape. Great opening line. It draws the reader in and makes them wnat to read more. The sky is a tumultuous battlefield. The ...

I liked it. Is it going to be produced? It could look really good. You never explained why the mother spent all her time telling them what to do and ...

Haha! Loved it, it was so funny. victims of a yellow death Does this mean the bus crashes, or it takes them to school and school is boring? that the ...

Haha! Loved the story. Not the kind of thing I would have done, but I have always wanted a time machine. And they were so amazed when the bell went, ...

I liked it, and the italics. The idea of the bench is so... oh, I don't know how to explain it. I guess the best word would be original. The ...

Hey. I see you haven't reviewed anything yet. You should probably go and review a couple of pieces before posting anything else. As for the writing, first of all, you ...

It was good. I went through a phase a couple of years ago where I was obessesed with Ancient Egypt, and because of that I know a lot about it, ...

Wow! That was... amazing. Your descriptions are really good, it was very easy to picture the dentist. This madde me sit there, transfixed on what I was reading. Your writing ...