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You are sick, man! It's like you don't want me to sleep! “I stole the Ouija board that we used a few nights ago. I didn’t plan on using it ...

But- but- you said this one wasn't scary! It was terrifying! Or maybe that's just because it's 11:15 at night and I'm the only one awake in the house, but ...

This was very different, indeed. Personally, I like it as it is. I don't think you need to add more. There's a certain feeling of detachment if you just leave ...

Well, I'm here. I have to say, I liked this one a lot more than the first one. It was less... spiritualistic. I guess because they weren't actually playing it, ...

Well, it took a while, but I'm here now and ready to critique. I only skimmed the other critiques, so forgive me if I repeat anything. -- There were seven ...

I'm here, as you asked. To answer your question, I thought it was a man and a woman arguing about the man being lazy after hosting a dinner arty. It's ...

Wow! Only one review. But I'm here now, like I promised. I really liked how you structured this. I love looking at different styles, and how you've done this reminds ...

I kept meaning to critique this, but I only just now have gotten time to do it. I wish my critique could be as good as some of the others, ...

Hey! I'm here, as promised. Sorry it took me so long. I've read the first five, an I just want to quickly say that they're pretty good, but cliche, as ...

Well, I'm here as promised. Sorry it took me so long to get around to reviewing this, I've been busy. But I'm here now, and I'll do my best to ...

There's one thing I'd like to point out before I start this critique. Here at YWS we ask that for every piece of your own work you post, you also ...

There's not a lot I can say, really. I thought it was quite short and it went very fast. I felt like I had started reading, and before I could ...

Well, here's my critique, as promised! I don't know how good it'll be, but I'll try. And I haven't read the other reviews, so I apologise if I repeat anything. ...

This was very strange. I didn't get it. It changed from something that I would probably put in Other of Non-Fiction, to what seemed like the end of a story. ...

This is very... dramatic. I think it would be better if you slowed down and showed us more about what the girl is feeling, because at the moment it's very ...