cheripop

I really liked it too. And I like your imagery--It's awesome just the way it is...please don't change it. Sometimes things need to be changed, and then some times things ...

Your introduction is really interesting, and it'll be neat to see what happens next. If you want any advice, I think you put too many "had"s in the last paragraph. ...

Wow... That was so sad :( But it was so good! :D I really liked it. I like your descriptions; they're so crisp. And I like how the time in ...

The characters are described well, and the scene is easy to visualize. You have all of the imagery stuff down, but what strikes me as slight problem is the plot. ...

I think it's really neat how you compared Kerry's relationship with this Dale guy to an Ivy plant. It really got the point across of how much he really dug ...

Writing mostly dialog is ultra tough, and I think you did well. The dialog flows good and is very believeable. I had a harder time following your story on the ...

I really like your descriptions-- they are so detailed. You even mentioned the brand of fragrance he wears. Nice. Just a little some thing I thought about in the last ...