chayonz

I dont get what really happened to her. Did she get raped or something?? Anyways can't wait to read the next one!! Plz post sooooooon!!!! Chayonz! oh and dont get ...

Hey. I haven't been ctitiquing ur stories but I have been reading them! I really like them. They aren't like most of the cheesy vampire stories I have read before. ...

Hey. The story is reallly intruiging. Its completely different from anything I've ever read. Although the black glob reminds me of that black evil gooey crap from the movie Spiderman ...

I have to say you're on to something. It is quite interesting the way he finds this egg. A dumbawaiter! he would've known? lol. Anyways i have to say though. ...

Hey. This story is nice. The Oath thing sorta surprised me though. Are they in like a different century or world or something? Just one thing though, you make the ...

OK next one. This part if a bit confusing. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- “Man, you are a good cook.” The boy merely blinked a

Now i'm going to critc YOUR books. lol. I feel thats the least i can do cuz you've been such a good critic for mine. :P Well I thought it ...

Its good! But in my opinion you need to stop saying 'Christian' so much. You seem to constantly say his name instead of saying 'he' or something like that and ...

The story is a bit off. First it does need a bit of spacing. And second, although you mentioned in your story that things were happening too fast for the ...

It was short and sweet but not very creative. But as a first its not all that bad. It is a bit cliche but nowadays a lot of things are ...