carameldreams

Thanks for the review I can be rather bad when it comes to spelling i actually dont think i have published anythin with out a mistake to be honest so ...

I reallly like this. It just simple and nice. I enjoyed reading it seems to have a nice flow and I think you have done a good job!

I realy like this poem and too have to disagree with the first two comments. I think the poem reads really well and its a very dark and scary poem ...

brill that mate

Thanks pop nice to know someone likes it :) and yeah i will make them changes thanks for the advice!

Amazing! I really like this poem i was actually excited reading it. Keep up the good work and i look foward to reading more of your stuff

OMG damn your talented and only 16 you seem to have so much awerness of the world but still manage to keep your vulnerability. You amaze me and i think ...

well thanks again to everyone for the advice and I will add a couples of verses to it and hopefully it will then make more sense and by the why ...

Thank for the advice

wow this is cool!