captainmichael15

Thanks for the feedback! I wrote this in freshman year so I figured it would be in dire need of proof reading. I am rewriting the entire story so this ...

I thought that the concept was interesting, how a vibrant representation of human joy was outcast by those who found her joy to be wrong. I think you could expand ...

I was surprised at the amount of atmosphere you created in such a short chapter. I nearly got pulled into the story already! If I had to pick something I'd ...