capriciouscoralyn

Hello ajruby! Thanks for the review but I really need to understand your critique so I could actually create a better poem. So, I'll start off with telling what it ...

Thanks Kyle. Hmm, I'll ask because I'm really curious. I really want to be better at this so. First point: Yes, I do think I understand it. It's a poem ...

Yeah... Hmm, I didn't visualize it as a lyrical sort of piece when I was writing it but I guess it does have that sort of vibe. And it does ...

Ohhh, okay. Aww, thanks. :) I'll keep that in mind when I try re-writing this. :)

Ohh, okay, consistency it is. Thank you for that advice! Though, would it have worked as poetic prose better than a real poem? Or do you think it would've been ...

Thanks! The thing is, I haven't written much poetry to realize that this would have made absolute sense when broken up. Thank you so much!

Well, that makes absolute sense! I haven't thought about breaking the lines up until now. Hmm.

Really? How is it lyrical? Wait, I'll go on and check what exactly that is.

I see ~ lol I can't believe I missed that. Thanks! (:

Ahh. I'll take note of the I's. Thank you so much. It was a risk to make the structure but I ended up doing it for the heck of it. ...