canislupis

Hi there! Only just heard about this yesterday, we just got back. (Email me!) I really enjoyed reading this! Here are some things I noticed: The air is cool here ...

Oooh... Prophecy of the Stones, by something or other Bujour. Part of this may be because it was poorly translated from French to English, but it was * shudders * ...

Hey! [He coughed up blood, more and more coming more frequently. How could he do this? He felt like he was betraying everyone who trusted him, who followed him by ...

I really don't see why these books were such a hit. Honestly! There are sooooo many books that are better than this series, and yet the author is a billionaire. ...

Hiya! As soon as I saw the word 'wolf' I had to read it. :roll: Anyway, this does feel a bit short, even for an intro. (Incidentally, is there more ...

HI Azila! Sorry this took sooooooo long. Also, I’m sorry if I repeat things, since I haven’t been reading the comments, if there are any. I kick my feet in ...

He did not know did not=didn’t I think it would flow better, anyway. The Blue Fire would not let him Would not let him what? Stop? Maybe clarify this a ...

Hi! I really enjoyed reading this, but we’ll get to that later… Nitpicks first, I suppose. ;) He shivered; he had turned the A.C. unreasonably high to try and manage ...

HI! First off, I have to say I really enjoyed reading this. As has been said, excellent imagery, though the spell check and grammar stuff could be improved. Here are ...

Hi! I don't have time for a full critique,:roll: but I'd like to point out a few things: 1. Spacing... I found myself distracted by the spacing problems, which is ...

I don't have any nitpicks, (other than ones already pointed out) either. ;) Overall, this was much much better, although very different from the first one. In answer to your ...

I liked it. I do think you did a very good job. :) My one peeve was the ending, which didn't seem to fit right. :) See ya around! ~Lupis

Gasp! It really is similar to my story. :) First of all, I have to say that I really enjoyed this. Nitpicks first. :) The candle in the window flickered. ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! For all that this is one of your first posts, it feels very polished, like you know what you are doing. You really have some talent! ...

Hi! Sorry if I repeat stuff. I should have gotten to this sooner. ;) Prologue: Ehem... I dunno, this part was very pretty and poetic, but the fantasy stuff was ...