brokeninpieces

Oh my God I loved it! It does need a little work, but not very much. I just love all of it, really, it's good. Dark, morbid, my kind of ...

I get it! Yeah! Ok, it's not bad, I like it. It reminds me of some of my friends' families, always pretending who they're not. They pretend to be happy ...

Awesome, really emotional but something people can really relate too. I feel like this with my parents and friends. I hide behind a mask and the only way I let ...

Thanks people! :D When I do edit it, I'll keep your advice in mind, but right now I'm trying to make a happy poem for this contest my English teacher ...

Thank you everyone, and thank you for the good advice. I write a lot of my poetry off of things that happened to me, or I just pretend I'm that ...

Oh thank you, and I'm glad you could relate to it. It happened to me after the guy I really truly cared about decided to end it, we had to ...

I've felt like that before, it was kind of morbid. Not bad though, just kinda sad. I could feel some anger though. What exactly made you write it?

I like it, sad and kind of angry, but really good. It does need some work though, there's a few words I'd change. But it is good and I've written ...

It was good but needs some work. It was really sweet though, good luck with the girl! ;D

I love it! The last part was my favorite. And it doesn't matter if it was more than one haiku put together, it just makes it original. I love it ...

It was really sweet, I liked it. I couldn't help but feel bad for the boy, deceit is never the answer, but I'd probably clap too. Nice words by the ...

I liked it, and very much agree the new piece is better than the old. It has a lot more details, really, very good, but I also agree with the ...

I really liked it and agree that you should write with your darker side more often. But of course, I love dark poetry, but you're very good at it and ...

I actually like the last four lines and the imagery was very good. I could feel the agony and despair, awesome! It does need a little work, but not much. ...

Is it really about a boulder? Well, either way, it's really good. XD