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I just wanna say, these are the worst lyrics I have ever written. I've actually speedwritten for this premise of a "fantastic miraculous day" and they turned out better than ...

Thanks! I tried to create a central theme that would stick throughout, then completely change it while still keeping the original theme.

Thank you very much! I think there are some really cheesy areas that I want to edit, but I think that won't be any time soon.

Haha thanks! To be honest, and this is to all of you out there, I do not think I wrote this poem as well as I really could have. There ...

Thanks! :)

Haha, those are two problems I noticed myself too, but I really didn't even try to fix them, because I liked it just the way it was. Thank you for ...

Haha thanks, I don't really see my self explaining it further because part of why I really am proud of this piece is the sense of mystery. Also, I had ...

It's there to not interfere with the "the line is drawn" part. In other words, I wanted to stick that in there to keep with the rhyme scheme of the ...

It may seem weird, but I did that on purpose. "out of the" seems WAY too generic to me, but "out of blue" just flows nicer, which is the idea ...

I'm not going to spend 300 points to make 3 different parts of the same story. Until I completely revamp this, that won't happen. and even then, it will likely ...

Thank you for your critique, and I agree with most things you've said. The story definitely does need some editing, especially to make the characters deeper, and there are many ...

Crushing the ant represents the territorial attitude I take on in the poem. And the description of the white wall is supposed to be simple; it is simply a canvas ...

You have a good point, but the plot is not short by any means. Besides, the idea of the style I'm using is to create many changes in the characters ...

Hahaha, ironically enough, this is a poem I had to write for my english class, and believe me, she's seen it. Said it was a little too dark for the ...

Why thank you good sir :)