break~my~heart

I wasn't sure about your poem at first. I ended up liking it though it was a bit elementary- The way you conveyed your message, your wording, pretty much all ...

Thanks for the review, it helped alot, and I'm going to try and edit it with your suggestions. But on the last line, I was trying to say that the ...

"It grows into a venus fly trap That opens its great maw And projects the ghostly images Of all the keys in the universe They revolve and revolve Like the ...

Dear God, (haha) Profound. Seriously. *Star* Sincerly, Ash

Thank you =) I will try to work on your suggestions. -ash oh p.s. It is about the holocaust... hmm How to make that fact obvious?? :?

Oh, and I forgot to say: Thank you, everyone!! :D -ash

A poem can be as short as the writer wants to make it.. Hey it's yours, and no one can tell you how to write ;) -ash (that sounded kinda ...

thanks everyone :) I'll get round to it pretty soon -ash

aah, get right on it :D thanks -ash

thanks everyone for the critts :D Hopefully, I'll edit this or do something with it haha oh yeah, Blink, when I said, "Your name is Loneliness, It is now forever ...

this is beautiful! you guys should post stuff on youtube too :D

touching, i enjoyed reading your poem. And yes i have lost a soulmate, but in a diffrent way. its sad to say, but it just had to happen that way. ...

thank you so much!! you have no idea how absolutely amazing that feels to have such a good critt!!!!!! well, ok maybe you do haha!! thanks :D XoXo~AsH

Hi there! I'm tennis! You know, I usually dread these types of poems. I think of them as twilight ripoffs, but this one actually wasn't that bad. Let's get to ...

same here about the 5th stanza. i would put some input but i havent the slightist idea on what you are trying to interpret!!! ok heres my unerstanding: To it, ...