brandenwallace

I liked it and I had a good idea of what was going on (I usually don't get poems at all). But yeah, the rhyming was sort of corny. Maybe ...

Ok.

Eldest was over 600 pages long... And you must read them in order to make any sense. Really Rose, its not a total rip off of anything. Sure any fantasy ...

Solis, this is a good piece of writing. I find myself like this quite often. Laughter and smiles are great for the human soul. This sounds like it is written ...

Words that are... just odd. Good stuff though. Somewhat appealing though I don't understand the big picture of it all.

The emotions were good. I don't much care for the style of writing (sounds more like a letter) but that doesn't keep it from being really good.

The writing is alright but I don't care for the subject.

yeah it was just a gritty to the point kind of thing, i didnt want people to have real details of everything, just feelings of it.

thanks for the feedback. no i haven't done any screenwriting, is that like movies and plays? so do you think i am cut out for romance writing?

thanks for the feedback. ive never tried writing romance. i didnt even think of putting it on here until the girl said she liked it a lot. yeah i agree ...

yeah i guess im a hopeless romantic... well thanks for the comment... any other critics out there???

Another chapter... enjoy, i know the paragraphs run together but the final copy is fixed. The sun sat high above Vales, the capitol city of the Kingdom of Valen. Birds ...

yes i have heard people say this is like lord of the rings. they say that the nightwraiths are like ringwraiths. well, if you would read carefully you would see ...

Has a lot of potential... After a revision or two it will be excellent.

thanks for the critique. it seems nowadays you can't use the word wraith without people getting an image of the Nazgul from lord of the rings. thanks though.