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Redwall is nice. Jacques, as a survivor of WWII, has painted war vivdly that the protagonist almost become surreal (although in reality they are since the characters are non-human LOL). ...

Seriously, are you kids really saying your true age? i came accross really good pieces in here and i am really astounded by how mature a writer you all sounded. ...

ah, young love... anyways, i like your style, that is ut is staright forward ad does not beat around the bush. althoguh you could polish it a little more. The ...

yo man! jumping off the bridge with the girl you are dating, yeah sweat! you must really like her man to do such extreme stuff like that. anyways i once ...

hi! this is my deferred review since your "first post" lol, i liked the first one better... but anyway... i haven't read twilight books, so i don't know if you ...

thios a nice way to attack whatever you wanted to say... i like your use of spaces... new paragraphs every now and then... you seemed to know the inner self ...

yeah, this is anice story... short as it may seem, its brevity and fullness would scarcely go unnoticed... i love the way you let the readers feel the tension (internal ...

This is one good piece. you have developed fully the characterization of characters... antagonism is of two-level--intra- (within himself arguing whther to stay on or to go) and interpersonal (that ...

You got such a solid characterization of both your characters. the length of your piece was just suitable enough to let them mature... it was romantic as it is supposed ...

This is just remarkable. In that very short story,you were able to develop fully the characterization of your characters. you have a great command of tools in evoking who the ...

I won't pretend that i'm quite good critiquing... anyway... you got a good only concern though was that you foucused so much with minor details... and consequently left the major ...